There’s rhythm in writing! 🎶
這個禮拜Presentality的Andrew來分享英文寫作的節奏!
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我的工作需要看非常多的英文。
其中有英文母語的人寫的,也有非母語的人寫的。最近,我注意到一個兩者之間很明顯的差別。這個差別很少有人提到,因為它無關文法正確,也不是有學問的用語,或是文雅的詞彙。
是句子的長短。
Well,更正確的來說,是長句跟短句的交錯。我發現,非母語人士寫的英文句子,不但比英文母語的人寫的長,而且是大部分句子都很長。
母語的人,尤其是很會寫的人,則是會把長句跟短句混合搭配。
那又怎樣?
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你可能會說 ok,以英文為母語的人比較會用短的句子,那又怎樣?句子的長短,跟我寫作的好壞,有關嗎?
關係可大了。
就像音樂,或是影片,文字也是「內容」。只要是「內容」,就有它的節奏。你可以想像一首曲子,從頭到尾都是很長的音,而且一點變化都沒有嗎?或是一部很長的影片,從頭到尾都是很長的畫面,而且一點節奏的變化都沒有嗎?
Well actually,你應該可以想像,這些就是要幫助我們睡眠的。
如果你不想要你的讀者覺得無聊或甚至睡著,我建議適度變換你文字的節奏。
但我們先看案例。
我拿一篇台灣人寫的文,跟另一篇美國人寫的,來做比較:把每個句子都分拆成不同的段落,句子的長短就一目了然了。
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但我們先看案例。
我拿一篇台灣人寫的文,跟另一篇美國人寫的,來做比較:把每個句子都分拆成不同的段落,句子的長短就一目了然了。
📌 台灣案例:Taipei Times Opinion
1. The TAIEX last month rose above 17,000 points as rallies in steel, shipping and some non-tech stocks offset a weakness in semiconductor and electronics stocks.
2. While news about a cluster of local COVID-19 infections connected with China Airlines cargo pilots and a hotel in Taoyuan fueled selling pressure early this month and pushed the local stock market into consolidation mode, the daily market turnover in the first two trading sessions of this month hit fresh highs.
3. Moreover, Taiwan’s stock trading volume last month began to surpass that of Hong Kong for the first time in 15 years, which was beyond most market participants’ expectations.
4. Taiwan’s daily market turnover exceeding Hong Kong’s might gradually become a new normal from this year, and there are good reasons for this.
5. First, Hong Kong’s stock market has lost its appeal to foreign investors since China last year imposed national security legislation on the territory, triggering a potential flight of capital and talent.
6. Second, many wealthy Taiwanese tend to park their overseas funds in Hong Kong, China, Singapore, Switzerland and the US, but government statistics showed that more than 80 percent of funds repatriated by wealthy individuals last year were from Hong Kong, as they saw the political situation in the territory worsen after its self-governance, human rights and freedom of speech were further suppressed.
7. Third, China’s new NASDAQ-style stock board — the Shanghai Stock Exchange’s STAR board — has emerged as a fast-growing capital markets center for Chinese companies at a time when rising China-US tensions have triggered concerns about their prospects of listing in New York, posing a growing challenge to the Hong Kong stock exchange.
8. On the other hand, Taiwan’s economic fundamentals, the central bank’s adoption of extraordinary monetary easing and the government’s fiscal policies have fueled continued rallies in the nation’s stock market since last year.
9. It might be too early to tell how long the consolidation trend might last, as a resurgent COVID-19 outbreak is coloring the global economic outlook, but some insight can be drawn from the stock market:
10. Taiwan’s GDP grew a larger-than-expected 8.16 percent in the first quarter, as exports and private investment remained healthy.
都是一堆很長的句子對不對?我們來看美國人寫的句子,也是一個主流媒體的 opinion 文。
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📌 美國案例:New York Times Opinion
1. I miss torturing Liz Cheney.
2. But it must be said that the petite blonde from Wyoming suddenly seems like a Valkyrie amid halflings.
3. She is willing to sacrifice her leadership post — and risk her political career — to continue calling out Donald Trump’s Big Lie.
4. She has decided that, if the price of her job is being as unctuous to Trump as Kevin McCarthy is, it isn’t worth it, because McCarthy is totally disgracing himself.
5. It has been a dizzying fall for the scion of one of the most powerful political families in the land, a conservative chip off the old block who was once talked about as a comer, someone who could be the first woman president.
6. How naïve I was to think that Republicans would be eager to change the channel after Trump cost them the Senate and the White House and unleashed a mob on them.
7. I thought the Donald would evaporate in a poof of orange smoke, ending a supremely screwed-up period of history.
8. But the loudest mouth is not shutting up.
9. And Republicans continue to listen, clinging to the idea that the dinosaur is the future.
10. “We can’t grow without him,” Lindsey Graham said.
📌 Note: 即使是比較長的句子,這位作者也會用標點符號拆散它:She is willing to sacrifice her leadership post — and risk her political career — to continue calling out Donald Trump’s Big Lie. 這就好比用句點一樣,讓我們讀起來有點停頓休息的時間。
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📌 注意到了嗎?
台灣人寫的英文,句子都偏長,而且長度都差不多。
美國人寫的就不一樣了:一個只有五個字的句子開頭,然後一堆稍微長一點的句子,然後再來一串短句。
你可能懷疑我故意挑選很極端了例子出來,而且幹嘛專門打台灣人呢?
所以想到這裡,我從我的書架上,隨便挑了兩本跟科技有關的書出來。左邊的,是美國人,矽谷知名投資人 Peter Thiel。右邊的是德國人,但注意了,是一個英文非常好的德國人。他不但是世界經濟論壇的創辦人,研究所也是在哈佛大學唸的。
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📌 兩本書 Introduction 是怎麼寫的?
Klaus Schwab (德國):
Of the many diverse and fascinating challenges we face today, the most intense and important is how to understand and shape the new technology revolution, which entails nothing less than a transformation of humankind.
We are at the beginning of a revolution that is fundamentally changing the way we live, work, and relate to one another.
In its scale, scope and complexity, what I consider to be the fourth industrial revolution is unlike anything humankind has experienced before.
Peter Thiel (美國):
Whenever I interview someone for a job, I like to ask this question: "What important truth do very few people agree with you on?"
The question sounds easy because it's straightforward.
Actually, it's very hard to answer.
It's intellectually difficult because the knowledge that everyone is taught in school is by definition agreed upon.
See the difference?
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📌 如何變換節奏呢?
需要Andrew的完整分享請留言「There’s rhythm in writing~」。
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Ray's Music World Episode 179 (#RMW179) – Ray Shen
🎧 Listen on mixcloud ▶️ https://www.mixcloud.com/ray-shen/rays-music-world-episode-179-rmw179-ray-shen/
Tracklist
001 - MBW - Some Unnecessary Lovesong
002 - Frequencerz feat. Mark Vayne - Ecstasy
003 - Ran-D vs. Mark Sixma - Zombie Clock (Ray Shen Mashup)
004 - Synthsoldier & Horyzon - Wandering
005 - Sub Zero Project feat. MC Stretch - Time Machine
006 - Blasterjaxx & Dr Phunk - Here Without You
007 - DJ Isaac - Fascinating Rhythm
008 - le Shuuk - Dark Side Of The Moon
009 - Narcyz x DJ Cyndi feat. Kosner Music & Anouk Adriana - Take My Hand
010 - Zerox - Stars
011 - DJ Isaac - Follow Me
012 - W&W & Armin van Buuren - Ready To Rave (Bass Modulators Remix)
013 - ANDY SVGE - Ravetrip
014 - Luca Testa & BIGMOO - Vibrations
015 - Da Tweekaz feat. Karra - Maleficent
*Second Hour*
016 - Porter Robinson - Musician (synthion Hardcore Edit)
017 - Fracus & Darwin & S3RL - Moonlit Eyes
018 - Steve Aoki x Sting & Shaed - 2 In A Million (Ben Nicky Remix)
019 - Quickdrop - High Up In The Sky
020 - Technikore feat. Teal - City Lights
021 - Kane Scott - See The Light
022 - Ben Defekt & Mike Enemy feat. Heidi Harries - Five Years
023 - Timmy Trumpet & KSHMR feat. Zafrir - The Prayer
024 - W&W x AXMO feat. SONJA - Rave Love
025 - Dr Phunk - No No No
026 - Timmy Trumpet - Mars
027 - *Classic Of The Week* O-Zone - Dragostea Din Tei (W&W Remix)
028 - Russian Village Boys - Ciao
029 - Russian Village Boys x Cosmo & Skoro - Cyka
030 - Yellow Claw feat. Juyen Sebulba & Sihk & Ramengvrl - Bassgod
031 - Radical Redemption & Nonsens - Beat Hotel
032 - Brennan Heart & Wildstylez - Lose My Mind (GPF - Greazy Puzzy Fuckerz Remix)
033 - GRAVEDGR x Lil Texas - Kamikaze (VIP)
034 - Da Tweekaz - Frozen (Disney Tool) (Caine & GPF Remix)
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《SPARK-AGAIN》
Ash flame / 焰火餘燼
作詞 / Lyricist:aimerrhythm
作曲 / Composer:永澤和真
編曲 / Arranger:玉井健二、 百田留衣
歌 / Singer:Aimer
翻譯:澄野(CH Music Channel)
意譯:CH(CH Music Channel)
English Translation: CH(CH Music Channel)
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中文翻譯 / Chinese Translation :
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日文歌詞 / Japanese Lyrics :
うらぶれたシグナル 無暗に光らせ
果てない迷路 進んだってどうせ
a 9 days wonder 絡まった旋律
解かぬままリピートしたら いつまでも 疼いて痛い
満ち足りない
変わりはしない? この世界
心したいようにして 吠える勇気は 微塵もないくせに
愛されたい
すがろうとしてるの? もういいって
澱んでくだけの思いこそ解けば
夜を撃つ サイレン 夢想への SOS
全部 朽ち果てていいから
透き通った一瞬を 呼び覚ましてよ
ねえ ここから Ash flame 宿して抗え
どんな無様でも手を伸ばせ
苦い笑みも ひび割れたくらいじゃ 壊れやしない
ぐしゃぐしゃ 丸めて心を 捨てようとして
的外れのまま 耐えるのには長すぎる滑走路
託されたい 変えようとしてるよ どうしたって
だからお願い あのフレイズを繋いでみせて
ぼやけたシグナル 両手にあつめて
急かすように 紡ぎだしたストーリー
a 9 days wonder 真夜中の不文律
ひとつも置いていかないよ いつまでも 抱いていよう
夜を穿つ サイレン 瞬くは SOS
どんなに 汚れ 削られても
夢という怪物は 美しいんだよ
何度でも Ash flame 宿して刃向かおう
誰に追われても構わない
過ぎし日の cloud nine 宿命果たすまで 絶やさないよ
中文歌詞 / Chinese Lyrics :
落下深淵的破舊信號燈,僅是毫無意義與規律地閃爍著
心中不存在終點的迷宮,無論如何前進也無法改變
僅需曇花一現般的短暫,便能呈現內心糾纏成結的雜亂旋律
若不解開而任其肆意反覆迴響——便將深藏心頭隱隱作痛
「還不滿足嗎?」
「難道連一點變化都沒有嗎?這無趣的世界。」
內心故作在意一般,卻連一絲回過頭喊叫的勇氣都沒有
「我僅是渴望被愛。」
「現在還在乞求能夠被拯救嗎?差不多夠了吧?」
若能將陷至水底深淵的思緒解開的話——
在這夜晚響徹的鳴笛,將劃破夜空為夢想呼救
哪怕一切早已腐朽枯涸也無妨
在萬物沉寂,而能聽見聲音的那一瞬喚醒我吧
聽我說,就從現在起,哪怕此身由焰火餘燼所成,仍不畏抵抗
即便那是多麼不堪入目的模樣,只要伸出手——
就算僅能迎來苦澀的強顏歡笑,也不會只因些許裂痕而盡數毀壞消逝
想將蜷曲成團、早已碎裂崩壞的內心捨棄擲出
卻難以擲中目標,看來膽怯而緩和衝擊的跑道仍太過冗長
希望能受到託付,故仍試著改變紊亂的心,難道不行嗎?
所以,就拜託你了,請將那纏繞我心的旋律一同繫起
早已模糊不清的老舊信號燈,就用這雙手收集四溢的光芒吧
如此朦朧,彷彿受催促而編撰出的故事般破碎
曇花一現般消逝,於午夜的月光下不成文形
哪怕早已四散,我也不會拋下任何事物離去。不論何時,我都會緊抱所有
在這夜晚響徹的鳴笛,將轉瞬穿過夜空呼救
不論染上多少汙穢、不論被剝奪了多少
曾名為「夢想」的怪物,仍是如此令人著迷
我將不斷地化作焰火餘燼,緊握利刃奮力前行
即便遭遇他人追趕阻卻也無妨
為了重拾逝去的欣喜過往,在抵至命運終點之前,我永不停歇
英文歌詞 / English Lyrics :
The falling shabby signal recklessly sparkles.
There's no meaning keep walking in this endless maze.
A 9 days' wonder with tangled rhythm.
If you don't untie it and just let it repeatedly playing, you only receive more pain in the end.
Not satisfied.
"Still no changes in this world, huh?"
As if keeping in mind, yet I don't possess any courage to yell it out loud.
I want to be loved.
"Still begging for help? It's enough."
If I can release all those emotions precipitating like dregs in the deepwater...
The siren that blasts through the night is the SOS sent from a dream.
I don't mind if it has already died in obscurity.
Call and wake me the moment when everything is clear.
Hey, I'll resist like the ash flame existing in my body from now on.
No matter how clumsy I may look like, I'll reach out my hand.
Even if the result is a bitter laugh, it won't break just by some cracks.
I have thrown this twisted, broken heart away.
Yet I can't hit my aim, the runway that endures impact seems to be too long.
I want to be reliable; I want to change no matter what. What's wrong with that?
So please, help me connect with that phrase.
The fuzzy signal I collected with my hand.
It's obscure as if the story that fabricated abruptly.
A 9 days' wonder with midnight's unwritten law.
I won't leave anything behind; I'll hold them forever.
The siren that pierces through the night is the instant SOS.
I don't care how much it has been tainted or deprived.
The monster called "dream" is fascinating.
I'll move forward with the knife like the ash flame existing in my body, again and again.
I don't care who tries to chase and stop me.
I won't let the flame die until I fulfill my fate and regain those bygone days of cloud nine.
fascinating rhythm 在 Janet Lee Youtube 的最讚貼文
The Malaysian MCO continues, and so must our joy and music. Live session from home on April 11 Sarurday, 2020 @ JaoTimKL Instagram on Facebook.
Songs:
1) Hang On Little Tomato
2) What Is This Feeling
3) Make Someone Happy
4) Molihua
5) Rider In The Wind
6) Lady Is A Tramp
7) Into The Sky
8) Fascinating Rhythm
9) Happy Days Are Here Again
fascinating rhythm 在 Janet Lee Youtube 的精選貼文
The Malaysian MCO continues, and so must our joy and music.
Live session from home on April 6 Monday, 2020 @ Janet Lee Music on Facebook.
Songs:
1) Moon River
2) Hang On Little Tomato
3) No More Blues
4) Pure Imagination
5) Je ne veux pas travailler
6) Smile
7) Fascinating Rhythm
8) Make Someone Happy
9) Happy Days Are Here Again
10) I Got Rhythm