花博絮語:從不請專業口譯到官網文宣菜英文——臺中宣言
花博又「花現」問題!
(「花現GNP」是花博宣傳口號 XD)
談談臺中市府官網宣傳《臺中宣言》的英文標題,見圖。
原版:累贅、不像樣的的台式菜英文:
《Taichung Declaration》has redefined the GNP Promote and raise the proposal for Green, Nature and People
設法順著原標題想表達的意思改成及格的英文:
The Taichung Declaration has redefined the pursuit of GNP growth in a new proposal of Green, Nature, and People
英文雖然對了,但仍累贅,沒有標題的樣子。
再改,使其精簡易懂,有標題樣:
The Taichung Declaration redefines GNP as Green, Nature, and People
最後這標題比較令人滿意,簡明、有重點、有哏。
* 重點明確:臺中宣言提出GNP新定義
* 明示GNP所代表的新名,但細節賣關子
* 藉此吸引讀者閱讀內文一探究竟
原標題在文法、寫作上的問題:
* 英文不存在中文新式書名號《……》
* 亂用動詞原形raise,不合文法
* 「GNP Promote」是啥?看似想表達「GNP提升」、「提升GNP」?就算視爲一個方案名,這也是糟糕的台式英文,正如Taiwan(,) Touch Your Heart 給人的感覺,無法端上國際。
問題出在把不合文法的動詞原形 promote、touch 一路用到底,不管意思如何,這顯示英語尚在牙牙學語階段,尚無動詞變化的意識和能力。
爲何 GNP Promote 是菜英文?進一步佐證:
請上 Google 搜索 "GNP Promote" (記得加英文引號),出現百餘條結果,清一色與「臺中宣言」有關,細查其實皆出自同一則臺中政府官方英文新聞文章,即本文探討的文章標題。難道「提升GNP」這概念在全人類有英語記錄的歷史中,是臺中市府首推?當然不!更合理的推論是:
一、像樣的英文不是這樣寫。
二、不像樣的這個英文表達,在全宇宙為臺中市府獨創。
這篇文宣,判斷又是不重視翻譯專業的結果。其實,有待批評的英文書寫問題還多著,有興趣的讀者不妨一讀,親自感受一下。
正如不久前逢甲大學一位外國英語教授針對「英語列爲第二官方語言」的計畫投書賴院長,批評這做法是緣木求魚,我也認爲台灣政府各層級應該檢討是否真已準備好,有能力拿出像樣的對內、對外的英語書寫。答案好像不證自明。
以下轉錄臺中官網全文,先是介紹何謂臺中宣言,後是臺中宣言英文版。(連結見留言)
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《Taichung Declaration》has redefined the GNP Promote and raise the proposal for Green, Nature and People
Issued by Information Bureau Date:2018-04-19
Taichung will conduct World Flora Expo in November. Green productivity proposed by the City Government was based on the Flora Expo addressed concepts of Green productivity, Nature sustainability and People with Green-ability.「Taichung Declaration」is aiming for inviting 100 cities to sign up. Taichung City Mayor, Chia-lung Lin has signed the declaration with Changwon City Mayor, Ahn Sang-soo tonight at Masan Baseball Stadium in South Korea, he also kicked off the starting game for the Taiwanese baseball pitcher, Weichung Wang, who is working currently in South Korea. It’s very meaningful to have Changwon City as the first city to sign up to the Taichung Declaration.
The theme of 2018 Taichung World Flora Expo is「Exploring GNP」 which change the old meaning of GNP as Gross National Product. Redefined GNP now means Green productivity, Nature sustainability and People with Green-ability for pursuing green productivity and facilitating the ecological eternity and embrace the nature in addition to pursuing the technological development. to make people’s living better. We wish to promote and raise the awareness of enhanced collaborations between international societies because this is the only way to connect people to help each other for sharing the goodness and prosperity for the world. (4/11*11)*Information Bureau.
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Taichung Declaration:
《Taichung Declaration》
A New Proposal for GNP
Have you ever thought about that, sound of blooming, could be heard?
Modern people are busy in earning their livings when they are pursuing the development of economics and technologies. They’ve been too busy to see things through so they’ve forgotten to listen to the hearts, realize the nature how close they are relying on the environment.
In 2018, let’s find out the balance for ourselves, let’s listen to the whispers of the nature, let’s listen to the happy sounds of the blooming, we can feel the the value of life and how great to be alive. After all, the meaning of life is to make the world better.
2018 Taichung World Flora Expo will raise a new proposal for GNP. GNP has it’s own life and means Green, Nature and People so it is no more a neutral number of Gross National Product. GNP stands for green productivity and facilitating the ecological eternity to make people’s living better.
It’s the time to move forwards, it’s the time to look back to the past. When we move forwards to develop the smart technologies in the future, we should remember to turn to embrace the nature again to facilitate the ecological eternity. We believe the prosperity and environmental protection can exist concurrently while the technologies can live with the nature.
Green Productivity
City in green and green in the city. The economical growth traded off by the environment will no more last as we know quite well how to play the role as one of the members in the global village. By applying green technologies, reducing energy consumption and create the shared resources to construct a sustainable city with green production and green economics as the backbone.
Nature Sustainability
The mountain geography left from the ice age and the recent wetland scenes formed by the waves and tides are all the low polluted ecological environment and diverse biological systems we would like to sustain. We will never pay the price of nature to pursue the technological prosperity again. We will rebuild the tight connections between people and nature to find back the harmony and balance between people and nature.
People with Green-ability
We are anticipating people will develop their green concepts and capabilities. Such trivial things as personal thought, diet, living and action or big scope as urban construction and future development, all of them will become the group energy of Green to contribute to the international society. So-called green concepts is to implement the actions, including respect the varieties and embrace diversity. No matter in the aspects of culture, race, politics, education or religion, we will maintain the old traditions and develop the innovations to share a better future with everyone. The aesthetics of living is to live with varieties and grow with the compatibilities.
We believe,
The perfect balance among production, ecology and living can be obtained.
Listen to the nature, connect with the society and link to the world.
Collaborate and facilitate the development of international non-government organizations.
Create the new model of urban management.
Because we connect with each other,
We will share the achievements and good results.
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diverse動詞 在 Alexander Wang 王梓沅英文 Facebook 的最佳解答
★ 想要進步英文寫作的關鍵: 跟動詞做好朋友 ★
要如何增進英文的寫作能力,是對於無論是要準備TOEFL, GRE, GMAT等留學考試、要寫申請學校的 Statement of Purpose / Personal Statement、寫英語論文的研究生、還是在公司需要使用英文寫作email的人,都常有的大哉問。
回答這個大哉問的切入方法很多,這篇特別分享一個重要觀念,是哥倫比亞大學某新聞學系教授(普立茲文學獎即為哥大新聞學系所創設)在教授寫作時,一定會提及的概念,那就是「跟過多的形容詞說再見」。將重心放在「動詞」,再來名詞,最後才是形容詞與副詞。為什麼最後才是形容詞與副詞?大家看看下面兩句簡單的句子,應該就明白
(1) He wants to have a cup of Starbucks coffee very much.
(2) He craves for a cup of Starbucks coffee.
對英文有一點sense的人,都應該知道同樣沒有文法錯誤,(2) 的人比較會寫作。把 want sth very much 用 crave 取道,他用了比較少的字 (succinctness) 就表達了更強烈的情感。而「短」跟「意思表達清晰到位」,即是寫作裡面最重要的兩個要素 (elements)。
你說這是厲害的小說家才需要注意的東西,對你來講太遙遠。真的嗎?我們再來看另外一個不一定是在寫作上,而是在日常生活中可聽到的例子。
(3) Coldplay is really amazing!
(4) Coldplay rules!
大家可以看到,(4) 再度的用一個動詞勝出。下面再給一個很簡單的句子給大家比較看看
(5) It rained heavily last night.
(6) It poured last night.
同樣的,(6) 直接秒殺解決了 (5)。
不過很多學生會問,自己要怎麼去培養出這樣的能力?我會建議大家第一件要做的事情,就是去書局買一個自己喜歡的筆記本 (信義誠品文具館有很多可以挑)。這本筆記本,有兩個功用,一半用來紀錄生活趣聞,一半用來在書中看到的漂亮動詞。在記錄生活趣聞時,不用太管文法、句型(不是說不重要,是因為今天的目的不是這個),將生活的事件詳細的敘述出來(你聽到什麼?看到什麼?感覺到什麼?聞到什麼?),寫完後可以用「同義字字典」或google 大神輔助,看自己使用「動詞+副詞」的部分,是否有可能「用一個動詞解決」。
再來的一個好方法,就是記憶「片語」。英文的片語,常常源自某典故或故事,因此常常用動詞和名詞即解決要表達的意思,可以輕鬆避免掉
用過多形容詞或副詞修飾句子的問題。請見以下比較:
(1) His hobbies are eclectic, ranging from piano repair to portrait painting.
(2)His hobbies run the gamut from piano repair to portrait painting.
以上的兩個句子,雖從(1) 的 eclectic (= diverse) 的使用能知道這個人的英文程度一定不錯,但 (2) 用 run the gamut from 這個代表 “cover a wide range” 的片語,還是直接秒殺 (1).
以上簡短的分享,希望能夠給真的認真想要進步英文的人,一點點努力的方向。加油啦!
diverse動詞 在 賓狗單字Bingo Bilingual Youtube 的最讚貼文
終於有逐字稿 & 例句翻譯:
· 點下列連結,並看「計畫更新」,有免費公開的逐字稿喔!
· 也可以直接搜尋「賓狗 嘖嘖」唷
傳送門: https://www.zeczec.com/projects/bingobilingual
1 【diverse 多元的】— 形容詞
Biden has pledged to make his cabinet the most diverse team in history.
2【leave no stone unturned 竭盡所能】— 動詞片語
The prime minister will leave no stone unturned in this process.
3【give the green light 批准】— 動詞片語
Argentina’s lower house has given the green light to the legislation.
4【dairy industry 乳業】— 名詞 /ˈdɛːri/
Greenhouse gas emissions from the dairy industry are rising.
5 【in real time 即時;同步】— 副詞片語
The system uses AI and facial recognition to verify the identities of Africans remotely and in real time.
簡單複習:
1)diverse 多元的
2)leave no stone unturned 竭盡所能
3)give the green light 批准
4)dairy industry 乳業
5)in real time 即時;同步
你想投稿嗎?匿名信箱在這:https://bingostory.carrd.co
YouTube 也有日更喔,歡迎來訂閱!
https://www.youtube.com/c/BingoBilingual
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在 CNET 的 SONY VITA 新聞裡有一段話如下
While I still think the Vita should come with a small-capacity Vita memory
card, give Sony a lot of credit for putting together such an impressive and
diverse collection of software for launch.
在逗號後面緊接著 give
請問各位高手, 這是哪種文法?
或者只是口語上可以這樣說?
非常感謝!
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